“Whatever you do… dont waste your time and/or money getting the windows cleaned.”
“Stock up on food and water… the apocalypse is near!”
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Lol. Thats some impending doom, type shit. Love it!
“Your money aint gonna be worth nothin tomorrow… so you might as well give it to ME, now!”
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“Hi. My name is “Mr. Mephistopheles” and I am here to clean your windows”
@Trenchfeet
Will,
I think the top wording is good. @WVWindowWashing’s point was what my first impression was.
I have a hard time concentrating on the wording because i am enraptured with the photography. Very cool and dramatic. Were you going for the “Your House Can Be The One That Shines” message? I think? maybe?
70% of communication is non verbal. It did feel a bit ominous but definitely a picture i can’t stop starting at.
I don’t get why you portray storm or bad weather. Wouldn’t you want happy, fun or exciting for the vibe?
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Soo, you’re saying my flyer sort of sucks then…
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The apocalypse is near, get your windows cleaned fast! Such a dark and stormy picture. Only the Munster Family or the Adams Family would respond well to that picture.
First Floor; Second Floor, Third Floor - all common jargon people understand.
It benefits no one to try and reinvent accepted grammar.
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Alright, my asked for criticism has finally bore real fruit! I was going for the contrast with the back of the card. (there’s a way out of the storm type thing) I decided the front is too busy and simplified it down to this:
And the nice clean back of the card with the offers…
Wow, the text reads a lot better in the pdf, but I didn’t want everyone to have to download it. Incidently, I brought this design to the post office and got the okay for eddm. It’s getting there…
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“We schedule 6 days including weekends!”
Reads a little awkward since there are 7 days in a week, obvious “6 days” will include weekends no matter which day you take off?
Will this only be used in the stormy season?
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Personally I would put the “call right now” before the phone number instead of after…
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I already cut off “including weekends”. Thanks. Yeah Arizona is in the middle, late middle of monsoon (dust storm) season right now. I’m going to get these to the post office Monday maybe Tuesday and out on Thursday hopefully, maybe Friday. It won’t really rain again until late May early June 2018. And the locals this goes out to know that. This is my first time taking a real shot at quantities of residential so I can have cash squirreled away to be able to market to the snowbird crowd in November when they flock down here.
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That subtlety is lost on me, why?
That’s great Jared…!
Yeah, but what about the cheapskates who will be asking for the “end times” discounts?
Clean windows aren’t cheap,
dirty windows aren’t clean.
I don’t understand what you’re asking.
If you’re asking why; because people will be back tracking after they read “call right now” to find the number.
So I took advantage of @At_Cost_Printing 's 15% off offer last Saturday. These bad boys came in today. I’m super happy with the quality and turn around time especially since I only ordered a thousand. Price was good too…
All checked out by the post office, just need to bundle them and pick routes. I know a bunch of you guys have done this before, I’m excited and nervous. I’ve got about five hundred bucks in this between time designing, printing and postage. Oh and thanks for all the input guys.
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Good luck bro!
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