Had this made up today tell me what you think?
I like it personally. I like when customers can actually see a picture of the owners or employees of the company.
When you say âhad this made upâ do you mean you got that done professionally?
I canât see anything wrong with it so to speakâŚi just think that with a flyer there should be a special offer jumping out of the page at the reader enticing them to ring you and learn more, instead your logo and main picture take up alot of space.
What is the condition or terms with the âfree screen clean worth $5oâ offer?
The customers can only see the back of your head though, thatâs hardly personal, they donât see much:o
I do think its a fine flyer, i am only being constructive in the above comments
how large is it 8.5x11???
I agree mostly with Rob
I think its very visually appealing⌠BUT there is no real offer.
You need a call to action: Call before sept/21/08 to receive your FREE screen cleaning.
I like the picture of you maybe show your face.
Most importantly though get some type offer up there.
It is very well designed visually it just needs copy. Hopefully Kevin can jump in here.
CFP is on a little vacation hell be back soon.
I like that your selling rain flow⌠but your customers dont care. They have no idea what it is⌠Just call it " gutter protection installation or something like that"
Dont get discouraged by this constructive criticism, It will help in the long run.
What about the other side? Are you going to do anything with that space?
Yea my uncle designed it for me. Its less the 8.5x11 has about a 1/2 white border all around it if you can imagine that. Ill tell him this stuff to see what he says. thanks guys.
Youâre using Sorbo ⌠no bueno ! :mad:
Just Kidding ⌠looks great and I am just like you are but changing my mind at this precise moment⌠I was all for looks, a really nicely designed graphic, glossy paper, 110% professional ⌠right now, at this exact moment Iâm working on Publisher to get a flyer done and print it on colored paper in my laser printer and deliver that to a couple of neighborhoods that I was scouting this morning. Theyâre not my target demographics, but Iâm not gonna lie, Iâve being doing very little work lately and just want to get some cash flow.
I think thatâs not gonna hurt me since Iâll be doing this in some sort of âSeptember Specialâ only.
Didnât mean to hijack your thread, but I do think, NOW, that this guys were right all the time, looks is important, core message is the KEY, or OFFER.
Hope that you do allright with that one.
Carlos
Updated.car_clean_flyer_coupon.pdf (2.62 MB)
Ok Iâm not going to jump on this one cause I know 1st hand and so does everyone else. How hard it is to make this stuff. Anyway. I think the offer color should be contrasted to the entire flyer. Totally differant color. I like that you have it preforated. Itâs a coupon which in my experience, people like. I ran a coupon for $10.00 off and got more calls then my 20% off ad. Donât get me wrong there are so many factors as to why my ad could have failed, but I had been told my the news paper sales rep his customers have stated a better response with coupons. I have to say the sales rep is a sharp guy, on the ball with calling for reminding about ads, offering discounts or calling to let know what other companies are running IE holiday ads. Anyway back on topic. The coupon needs a deadline. Your call to action is standard âcall todayâ but I like it. Itâs simple and to the point. I have always liked ads like that.
BTW with that company name. Have a very good website built that is SEOâd. You will get great traffic. I get a good 10% of my calls from my website.
hey Carolina Clean!
Listen - this is a beautiful-looking flyer, but your content could definitely be tweaked to make it more about them (the prospective client).
Iâm gonna spend some changing it, to demonstrate what I mean, and then see if I can upload a revised version.
Hold tight.
Kevin
P.S. Very clean design. Loving that part, for sure.
Okey-dokeyâŚIâm now officially ready for bed!
Iâve tried to incorporate some important additions. Please see the uploaded image.
Itâs not perfect, but itâs better, and should help you get the juices flowingâŚ
Do people still buy that line?
âYour family & friends will be jealous like crazyâ
As soon as I read that - it turns my light out 
First off I did not read everyones response, so forgive me if I mention what has been discussed.
Kevinâs version is pretty darn good in my opinion. It is easy for one of us (who are not like are target customer) to get bent for some line in the entire flier. Would that line bother everyone?
The original version of the flier lacked a lot and had a lot of the turn offs we are told not to do over and over (like big logo at the top)
It is also important that Kevin added personality with lines like âtheyâll be jealous like crazyâ and using words like pesky.
I would change very little in Kevinâs version.
[B]Karl:[/B] I put that in to keep it real and conversational, and also to connect the service with the human need for acceptance and peer approval. Itâs one of those little emotional/psychological triggers that can be very motivating.
Everyoneâs different, though, so I guess it could turn some people off (like you!)
I also basically stole some desired positioning from topnotchâs website, too, instead of trying to figure out what angle he should come from.
Iâm still looking at marketing in its entirety - perhaps I just found the European difference or perhaps its just me?
âŚI like the rest of it though 
No, this is all very interesting, considering all reactions and trying to figure out what you like/dislike.
Perhaps a more formal comment would appeal to youâŚ
âYour friends are going to be so jealousâŚâ vs âjealous like crazyâ
I really donât know topnotchâs market, but casual generally outpulls formal. More real. Perhaps this particular lingo isnât a proper concession for casual, tho
Iâd leave friends & family out of it. Perhaps something like âhave the best looking glass in the neighbourhoodâ, but even that smacks of one upmanship.
Fair enough.
This would be a perfect example of where to split-test something, to find out which approach works best. Half and half.
Its quite possible that youâre bang on and your approach will outpull mine above. Just gotta test and find out.
Maybe a challenge for topnotch? (Justin)
Perhaps Iâve been away for civilisation to long. As I said, I know nothing about marketing.
